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While finding her missing brother Robert, whose last location was the Town of Marina, Tania ... Show More
American Gothic, Comedy, Cross-Genre, Horror, Modern Romance, Mystery, Other, Paranormal, Romance, Thriller
Horror, ghost, romance, love, alone, the, lifeless, nanowrimo, sonu, friend, girl, Tania, blood, god, paranormal, supernatural, car, dark


Love is an ocean
Love is a potion
Love has ups and downs
Love is a feeling that the heart crowns
Love can fight death
Love can fight the worst fate

 “Start! Start!” I inserted the key again, but the car didn’t start.

“Oh god!” I screamed out of frustration. Glancing out of the car and all I could see was darkness, never ending darkness. There were no lights on the street. I thought for a while but nothing useful clicked me. My latest smartphone had no signal, not of any use. I slid it in the pocket of my pink coat.

I looked up in the mirror of the car, my face clearly showed fear. I was stuck! As I bit my nails, a leaf came flying and touched the glass of the window. I got out of the car. The outside was cold and the wind raced wildly. The earth was hardly visible but it was present. I felt it below my shoes. The sound of dried leaves dashing against each other and the strange voices of unknown animals played in the background. Thank god, I had a torch. I kept the torch light on and tied it to my waist.

“You can do it” I cheered myself, as I studied the height of my car. Walking out of my high heels, I opened the door and placing my feet on the floor of the car, I tried climbing on the top. It didn’t help. So I climbed on the seat and tried again. This time I made it. Thank god, I was wearing my yoga pants and not those tight leather pants. Once on the top of the car, I slowly got up.
I took out my smartphone. The signal had one bar.

“Yay!” I screamed and almost jumped with joy. A loud thud echoed as my feet hit the car’s top. I was almost about to fall, but I quickly sat down. I smiled from ear to ear. I dialled the number quickly and waited impatiently for Maya, my friend, to pick it up. And then I could ask her to send help. Then I realised there was no sound. The signal was lost again. Getting up I raised my feet and stretched my arm. It showed a signal bar. But how do I talk with the phone in my hand and my arm stretched? How do I even dial?

 I took a deep breath, “Tania, come on! You can do this!”

I brought the smart phone back to my level and kept Maya’s number on redial. That way I could do it. I stretched my arm again, as high as I can. The phone kept redialling Maya’s number with the speaker on. It redialled five times but no sound came. My arm pained a bit. I needed to think of something else. I stood on one leg, the other raised to form a 90 degree angle. It was not that difficult to maintain my weight on one leg, I did that in the ballet classes. But I forgot just an important thing, I never tried ballet on a car.

I lost my balance and fell. Screaming on the top of my voice, I closed my eyes. I waited for the hard ground to hit me. Instead I felt two arms holding me. I smiled, my eyes still closed, thinking I have a rescuer. Just like in movies…. the handsome young hunk saves the beautiful chick and they fall in love.
“Thank you” I said before opening my eyes. All I saw was wrinkles, I think it had two eyes behind big round frames, a nose and cracked lips. It was an old man, can’t tell how old, he had too many wrinkles on his face. He held me in his arms like a baby. I started screaming again.

“Leave me! Put me down” I yelled at him. He just stared at me. I pushed him with a hand, he let me off and I fell flat on my back. “Ouch!” a pain shot up my spine.

I tried getting up but it hurt. I cried in pain and found the old man nowhere. I somehow stood up to find him standing to the other side. The only person I saw here since the past two hours.

“Excuse me, I need help… do you know of a garage or a hotel around here?” I asked him still feeling the pain.

He looked in my direction and then pointed to the right. His finger old and wrinkled. I turned back to see where he directed. There up the small hill I saw a light. A very dim light. I knew now as I would turn back, he would have disappeared. I was prepared. But as I turned back, I found an old lady standing there. I screamed out of shock. My heart was pounding.

“You! Who are you?” I asked with my voice shaking. But the lady just walked away towards the woods.
“Hey! I am talking to you!” I called after her. But she was no more visible.

I raised my hands in question and turned back to the light. God knows how I am gonna go there? Is there something? Or is it an Illusion?

I looked around, no one to ask. It was no point going up there. It’s 6 O’ clock and the place is covered in darkness. And if I go up there, walking, it would be darker than ever. So I got back in the car. I sat in the car starring the road that was in no moment, invisible completely.

I woke up as a loud noise hit my ears. Something scratched against something. I must have felt asleep in the car. I looked at the road, which was still black. And then, I glanced at the car window and my voice froze … my heart started beating so faster. I saw two eyes, red eyes, staring me. I rubbed my eyes to brush off the sleep. I saw a girl, dressed in black, her face pale and she was so close to the window.
She knocked on the glass of the window. I thought for a second and opened the door of the car. The girl was younger than me, must be 16. Her eyes were brown now, maybe my sleep affected her eye colour earlier. Her eyes locked at me.

“Hm… my car is out of order. Do you know any garage around here?” I asked the girl.

 She shook her head, indicating “NO”.

“Oh … okay, is there a house up that hill?” I pointed to the light on the right.

She nodded. That meant I could go up there and ask for help or I could find a phone, with a network. But I didn’t know the way.

“Can you come up with me? I don’t know the way..” I requested her softly.

She nodded again and I didn’t expect her to.

“Great! After you” I smiled.

Not a single expression showed on her face, she started walking towards the light. I followed her. I had no other option left. So I headed towards the light….

The girl walked without turning back like she’s walking all alone. It was cold so I covered my head with the hoodie of my coat. The road was very narrow and full of rocks. I felt them as I walked. There were trees on both sides of the road. And I knew there were also a lot of wild animals. I wondered what time it is and remembered that when I fell from the car’s top, the phone fell too. I stopped. I needed to find my phone, I realised.

“Wait, I forgot my phone. I will just get it back. Please wait!” I called out to the girl. She stopped but didn’t turn back.

I ran down back. Reaching near my car, I searched on the road. The torch light did help. I looked below the car and there it was. I stretched my arm and got it. The screen was cracked in the corner.

“Oh man!” then as I got up I glanced at the back seat of my car. Someone was there inside sitting. I was scared, who got in and when? Could it be a wild animal? I turned to the door and pulled it open. The figure was dark, so I flashed my torch to see the old woman who had disappeared in the woods. Her hair were open, her eyes were bleeding. She grinned at me. Some of her teeth were missing and then blood poured from her mouth, making way through the gaps.

My heart beats raced. I was shocked and frightened. She moaned and her hands tried to grab me. I ran somehow, as fast as I could, towards the light. I didn’t wait to see if she was back of me. My legs hurt but I didn’t stop, till I reached the girl. She still stood there, her back at me.

“You know … there’s a old woman in my car… she …” I couldn’t speak more. My breath was caught so I just let it go. The girl started walking.

“Wait!” I managed to say. But she didn’t. So I started walking too. The ugly face of the woman was stuck in my mind and I shivered.

The girl kept walking, I behind her. The light was increasing as we moved closer to it.

I remembered my phone, it was in still in my hand luckily. I checked the time, it was 2 am. We had been walking for the past half an hour. So what was the teen girl doing near my car at this time? I looked at the girl, she was walking. My heart pounded again. Could she be a ghost too? I stopped walking. So did the girl. How did she knew that I stopped, without turning back?

“Who are you?” I asked and thought it was a bad question. The girl didn’t answer. I took a step closer to her, my fright increasing with every step.

I reached closed enough to the girl. I placed a hand on her shoulder and she turned back her face without moving her body. I pulled back my hand, her red eyes were so intense. I screamed. And ran far from her. She stood there with her neck twisted, looking at me.

I ran and ran, until a rock hit my leg and I fell down unconscious.

A loud horn ringed in my ears. I saw my car coming towards me. The headlights flashing my face. It was dark so I could not see the driver. I moved my legs in an urge to get up and run. But my legs pained. My left leg felt like someone hit it with a hammer. It was stinging. My car rushed to me in full speed. I screamed and shouted,” Stop!”

 So you think there is no place for love? well just read further to find out...

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  • annah brown commented on :
    4/1/2016 3:26:35 AM
    Hello good day, i will like to meet you in person, am miss Anna, am from France and am leaving in London, please contact me on my email id at (, ... Show More
  • TP Keating commented on :
    1/27/2016 7:21:34 PM
    Creepy and chilling, I like it!
    • HemDiva Thank you so much! Thanks a lot for reading!
      1/28/2016 7:09:20 AM
  • Andre Clemons commented on :
    4/18/2015 1:15:49 AM
    The cover was one of the things that really drew me to this story. So creepy and haunting I felt compelled to start reading this. Poor Tania. It's as if this dark shroud ... Show More
    • HemDiva Thanks! I'm glad you liked the cover, I just happen to come up with it. That's great that you find it creepy, I worked real hard to come up with the first chapter. :)
      4/24/2015 2:10:51 AM
  • Ryan Watt commented on :
    11/17/2014 6:28:27 AM
    You definitely know how to create a horror mood. Lots of great suspense, as well as a protagonist who doesn't just run up to a scary light on a dark hill, not without ... Show More
    • HemDiva That means a lot! Thanks. Yeah, I wanted it to be realistic. Good news is that the coming chapters may answer these questions. Keep reading! :)
      11/17/2014 1:00:53 PM
    • HemDiva All questions about Tania are answered in the latter chapters! Have you read them?
      1/17/2015 2:27:57 AM
  • Shannon Smith commented on :
    1/8/2015 5:05:52 AM
    I like the poetry as an opening.
    • HemDiva Thank you so much! Please keep reading and commenting.
      1/8/2015 1:43:54 PM
  • Ryan W. Norris commented on :
    11/26/2014 8:22:34 PM
    A sweet little love story with a very appropriate cover. Nice mood setting. Well done with letting the creepiness sink in and take hold. I'd encourage a solid ... Show More
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    • Ryan W. Norris You don't write like a non-native speaker. I would have worded things differently if I had known. My advice to read it out loud and see what sounds right will obviously not work as well. Regardless, your story has a nice suspenseful core.
      11/28/2014 10:56:32 PM
    • HemDiva That's okay. Advice/suggestions are always welcomed. Actually you helped me very much, telling me what's missing and what's wrong. Thanks. Hope you keep reading.
      11/30/2014 5:10:14 AM
    • HemDiva It's fixed! thank you. hope to see your comments in the later chapters.
      12/24/2014 3:34:20 AM
    • Ryan W. Norris It looks much more polished.
      1/2/2015 2:10:48 AM
    • HemDiva Thank you! :D
      1/3/2015 11:13:01 AM
  • RJ Stein commented on :
    12/22/2014 3:03:28 AM
    Good creepy tone overall. On the 10th paragraph, there's a sentence "I tried getting up and it pained a lot." I'd probably replace "pained" with hurt or say what hurt ... Show More
    • HemDiva thank you. keep reading.
      12/24/2014 3:34:49 AM
  • J. Humphrey commented on :
    12/8/2014 6:53:26 AM
    The story is very drawing. The beginning raises questions as to how she got into this situation. The horror aspect is quite chilling; I found myself anxious about the ... Show More
    • HemDiva Thank you so much! You made my day! 😃
      12/8/2014 9:22:51 AM
  • Evan Marcroft commented on :
    11/29/2014 11:22:27 PM
    The language is a little bit wonky, but I saw in another comment that English isn't your first language, so that can't be considered a problem . It doesn't detract much ... Show More
    • HemDiva Thank you! I'm so glad the horror works. It is perfect in my language if I translate it, but it may sound 'wonky' in English. As I said, I am improving. Hope you continue reading and commenting.
      12/3/2014 7:20:24 AM
    • Evan Marcroft Sure thing! Problem is finding the time. :P Having a real job sucks.
      12/3/2014 8:04:05 AM
    • HemDiva That's so sweet and kind of you! Thank you. And I know, I myself have to catch a lot of chapters of my favourite serials( including yours), but I don't find time. But have to say that the chapters are so awesome that I anyhow manage to find time to read them. :)
      12/3/2014 11:23:07 AM
  • Penelope Black commented on :
    11/14/2014 12:52:05 AM
    Ooo nice I'm interested in knowing if she's stumbled into some new world or some closed off part of the world. Different questions to be asked like the girl and old woman. Can't wait to read more. :)
    • HemDiva Thanks! I'll be adding new chapters soon! Hopefully on or before Tuesday. Keep reading. Hope you enjoy it. :D Add the story to your bookshelf, so you'll be notified when a new chapter is added.
      11/15/2014 6:09:37 AM
  • Ann gave
    12/16/2014 1:09:13 PM
    Intriguing start! Creepy and fun to read.
  • Lynn Hill gave
    11/26/2014 4:02:31 PM
    I do like this chapter. It's kind of freaky how everyone is silent and randomly popping up from nowhere! I only noticed a couple of your phrases every once in a while ... Show More
  • B gave
    11/18/2014 5:29:17 PM